Haiku: About Night

My third haiku.

ゆくりなくわれる夜半流れ星

Without a whisper,

Night's veil abrubtly torn--

A falling star.

季語：流れ星 (for autumn)

Commentary:

I borrowed some words from one of Shiki's haiku:

あかづりのわれる夜半や霜の鐘

I really like the image that the silent night is ended by a sudden sound.